"Three days had passed since the bombs went off.
Doctors had done what they could and left him to recover in a coma. She was sitting by his side when he opened his eyes. There was panic in them.
She asked him: Who’s the most beautiful girl in the world? It was a question he had posed rhetorically and answered a thousand times.
Jenny May, he whispered. He remembered." ~ Sarah Schweitzer
In the opening lines we get a beautiful, yet touching image of Fucarile's fiancee waiting at his hospital bed. Not only does Schweitzer paint an image, she brings in the relationship of these two people without mentioning it.
As the long piece goes on, Schweitzer continues to craft the story well. She breaks down the piece into several subheadings, that represent the main idea, and also the long journey of being at a hospital bed to where the two stand today.
One of my favorite moments of this piece is when Schweitzer focuses in on the struggle, and busy schedule of her catering to her injured fiancee months after the bombing.
"THREE WEEKS into being home, they are rarely there.
The refrigerator-mounted white board on Aug. 6 is typical: Monday: 11:30 a.m. Dr. Kwon @ MGH; Tuesday: 10 a.m. PT @ Peabody Spaulding, 2:15 p.m. Dr. Goverman @ MGH; Wednesday 10:15 a.m. Dr. Crandell, 11:15 a.m. Speech therapy, 3 p.m. Dr. Schneider @ Spaulding; Thursday: 9:30 a.m. visiting nurse; Friday: PT 10:30 a.m., OT 11:30 a.m.
Jen pads out of the bedroom shortly before 9 a.m. Her hair is combed into wet pleats and her skin is scrubbed to a taut sheen. Eyeliner seems to hold her eyes open." ~ Sarah Schweitzer
Not only does Schweitzer describe "they are really there" with the overwhelming number of appointments in the week, but closes it out with Jen being drained out from the words "eyeliner seems to hold her eyes open." Schweitzer displays of in the moment scenes, and that takes the reader back a bit on the journey as a whole. What makes this profile so great, is her descriptions, her ways of picking the right scenes to fit the article, and the lasting appeal this article carries. It is heavenly thriving on emotion, and it really makes the piece, because it is such a serious profile on a serious event that took place a few months ago.
Going into my profile, I wanted to strive to paint an image, and most importantly get the lasting appeal and I believe this article is something to strive for, because it is just so great.
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